Bane's Graphic Novel - The Official Thread

[Bane]

Some more concept ideas for Baney. This time I messed around with ideas for the scarring on his eye (I realised too late that I'd done the eye green, when it's meant to be white.)

Tell me what you think. Is this time more obviously a scar? And is it scary/in a sense "evil" enough?

[Kest]

Now this has a good, raw, red, scarrish look to it. ^^ It has the advantage of being evilly shaped so as to inspire fear in his enemies, while also still looking like a scar. xD

I like.

[Takumi]

ditto to that.

[Bane]

New character - his name is Soil, and he is an acquaintance of Bane's. Hope you like. =]

[.::Umberwings]

Oooh, smexy boy<3

[Bane]

Meet Phoenix



Tell me what you think.

[Delete]

Phonix is a cutie!

[Featherstar]

Phoenix looks sweet and cute. If he's suppossed to be evil, then you may sic him on me. :)

[Bane]

lol xD I'll leave that a mystery...

But srsly, he can't pull of being mean..

[fjeld]

Jeez, Bane, thats awesome... -jawdrop-

[Bane]

<33 Thank you.

I actually have some (semi)exciting news on this. So I've been carrying around my notebook for a year and a bit now, accumulating notes and slowly developing a plot. And this year I've decided to enter NaNoWriMo (http://www.nanowrimo.org) which will give me a deadline to write up the storyline for the graphic novel. So by November 30th I will be sharing some excerpts, hopefully ^^

[Pripyat]

-fangirl scream-
I think it's exciting. I can't wait to see some of your excerpts. =D

[m e i l&co.]

I read some of your roleplaying posts Bane, and they are impressive. I'd love to read a story by you.
werid, I'm also entering the NaNoWriMo 0-0

[Bane]

Thanks Miel! What's your username there?

[m e i l&co.]

mindymindy , which is one of my more random names. What's yours?

[Bane]

Kay guys, here's the prologue. I am pondering whether to bother drawing this out or if I should just cut to the chase.

The rain was cold and heavy, as it attempted to destroy everything that stood in its path. The grass was flattened by the force, and the ground beneath it pummelled into a thick layer of mud. The sound of rain can sometimes be a soothing one, but this night it was unrelenting. The trees moaned as they created a canopy against the harsh weather for all the forest creatures that panicked beneath their branches – squirrels and mice fled for their nests within tree trunks or beneath the ground; deer slowly gathered together to create warmth and shelter for one another; and a single fox boldly trotted to its den, pelt soaked through but a plump pheasant clasped between its jaws, that signalled a successful hunt.

It was all routine for the animals of the forest; the main priority was to settle and sleep the storm through. However, something wasn’t right.

Thunder ravaged the sky.

In the open beside a fallen tree, many felines were gathered. Their fur was heavy with water, but they appeared unaffected. All eyes were ablaze, as the cats paced and panicked and yowled to each other. Their intentions were clear – they wanted to get beneath the roots of the tree. But one stood in their way. He was a small but muscular black cat, with piercing green eyes that formed a look of defiance upon his face.

“I won’t let you take him!”

The tom spoke confident words, but his voice faltered. Several of the cats laughed and jeered. It wasn’t obvious why they didn’t move any further toward the tom, except from one cat who sat amongst them. He was large, with thick long orange tabby fur. His yellow eyes stared calmly and coolly at the black tom, whose legs trembled slightly under the weight of the many eyes that mocked him.

“Come on, Finn, don’t make this hard.”

The orange tabby was obviously tired and irritated, but he managed to create a sense of calmness about his tone.

“You know I don’t want to take the kit, but I have to. It was the order I was given.”
Finn’s eyes searched the area desperately, trying hard to think of a way to solve this mess he was in. Truth was that there were bad odds.

“Orders, it’s always the orders. Why can’t you see that you and your stupid orders are tearing us apart!? No, I for one won’t stand for it any longer. If you want-”

Finn hesitated, observing the many recognisable faces that stared back at him. He clenched his eyes shut, and swallowed hard before he finished his sentence.

“If you want the kit, you’ll have to go through me.”

Many of the cats were silent now, though through the harsh chorus of the rain it was hard to recognise. The orange tabby was kept his cool gaze on Finn, until he let out a short sigh.

“Very well, brother. So long.”

The tabby kept his vision clearly focused on Finn. Only a flick of his tail and a short nod of the head indicated his intentions. From the crowd of cats that were gathered behind him, two stepped from the ranks. They were far larger than Finn, and their muscles were hardened by years of training. They prowled forward like shadows, circling the tom from both sides. Finn’s eyes were filled with terror, but in one final attempt to escape he slashed the cat to his left across the nose, and made a dash for the gap that opened. But he was too slow – in perfect harmony the two struck, pinning the black tom to the ground. Finn struggled and yowled furiously, fury lighting up his eyes.

A single slash to the throat ceased all movement. The tabby looked on with approval.

He stood up instantly.

“Search the den! Do not stop until that kitten is found. He is ours now.”

The cats suddenly sprang into action, stunned out of their silence. They crawled through the entrance of the den, as a unit, each of them taking a different route; it wouldn’t be long now until the kitten was found.

***

The yowling echoed through the underground den. A cold shiver ran down the she-cat’s spine, and she allowed herself a moment to mourn the passing of her mate.

However soon after came the yowling of a different sorts – they had entered the den. That moment of mourning was gone, as the female turned to the other cat that was hiding with her. He stood protectively over the litter of three, licking each of them individually to stop them from shivering. His own dark tabby pelt shivered uncontrollably, and his eyes were wide with fear.

“Dearest Kai, we have no time.”

The she-cat grabbed a piece of ripped cloth within her teeth, and placed it on the ground between the two cats. Her ears were pinned back, anticipating the moment when the others would reach her. Despite the obvious rush she was in, the cat grabbed one of the kits by the scruff as carefully as if it were a leaf. She placed the kitten on the cloth, then grabbed opposite corners of the cloth and indicated for Kai to take it with a small nod of her head. He looked confused, but obeyed.

“Take him, and go. There is another entrance to the north of here – once you are out, head east, toward the city. He will be safe there. Do not stop until you get there.”

“But why-“

“I cannot leave my kits here, but don’t worry. They daren’t kill me.”

The she-cats eyes filled with tears, as she looked at her son with pride and sorrow. Kai hesitated, but eventually he stood and moved closer to his mother, nuzzling the side of her cheek affectionately.

“Don’t worry, mother, I will get him there.”

The she-cat allowed herself a moment of affection, as she leant into her son’s thick fur and let his scent calm her. But the moment was over quickly – the sound of tumbling stones meant that they had knocked through one of the barriers Kai had put up. Both the cats eyes grew wide, and instantly Kai pulled away and went.

He ran through the small spaces, keeping his head high so that the cloth-covered kitten wouldn’t hit on any of the jagged rocks. As for himself, he cared little as he grazed and banged his sides and paws on all the obstacles that stood in his way. Determination was plastered across his features, although it faltered when he heard his mother’s yowling. But he daren’t stop, not even for breath; his destination was set, and he would not stop until he got there.

Eventually, the entrance was found, and Kai leapt through it mercilessly. The hard rain didn’t waste time in flattening his originally spiked pelt of dark tabby markings. Now in terrain that he knew well, Kai headed east as he was instructed, keeping up a fast and unrelenting pace.

Dawn was fast approaching as the tabby got closer and closer to his destination. The rain had faded until eventually it halted completely, and the clouds in the sky allowed the first rays of sunlight to hit the ground beneath it. The canopied shelter of the trees began to thin, until Kai was racing through deep grass. Unable to see where he was going, Kai began to panic but never let his pace slow. For a moment he closed his eyes, and simply allowed his paws to take him where he wanted. Fortunately he opened them soon after – the grass stopped abruptly, and he had to scramble to a stop.

Kai’s heart was pounding, his chest heaving as he looked around him, the small bundle still carefully gripped in his jaw. Above him were the empty branches of an old tree, twisted and crooked. It's roots slowly weaved and merged through the sandy outcropping of a small cliff - Kai's paws gripped the edge fiercely. But his eyes were soon drawn ahead of him, as in the distance, shrouded in a cloud of mist, tall structures lifted high into the sky. Kai’s eyes grew wide with astonishment – he had finally made it.

The city.

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[Kestrel]

=D Very, very nice, Bane! It's your choice whether you want to draw it out or not, but it's a great opening either way. It really draws you in and makes you wonder what's happening next. <3

[Featherstar]

I wanna hear the rest of the story!!
Yay for lateness and Feather-spasms. :)