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Post by Writ & Nightshift on Oct 28, 2009 20:12:03 GMT -5
Name: Nightshift Age: 29 moons Gender: Tom Personality: Smooth, slick, a seamless liar, sarcastic, funny and almost totally heartless. His consience has little to no affect. Nightshift was a born killer. Sure the other aspects of his personality make him real popular among the ladies, but the things he does.....*shivers*His favorite thing to say is "Trouble at the homestead" which can be phrased as either a question or a statement. Description: His name kind of hints at it. His name is Nightshift so you'd expect a black cat. Good job! Nightshift's fur is jet black, sleek and well-groomed. His nose is black as well. Nightshift has many scars criss-crossing him like spider gossamer earning him the nickname "Spiderweb". The most prominent of the these marks are the three that cross over his left eye. He's blind in that eye, his eyes being cold, hard gray. Nightshift is tall, long, lean and lithe; capable of running for short distances. History: Much of it is unknown. He was born, he's living and eventually, he will die. All that has currently been dug up is that when he was very young, he fell in love with an off-limits kitty. Nightshift went all Romeo and Juliet on her without killing himself. He started his gang he calls The Coven in hopes of meeting somebody that will be able to kill him fairly. Nightshift is currently searching for a clan in hopes of finding a worthy adversary. Other: Spots open for The Coven!!
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I wont sooth your pain.... i wont ease your strain. I just look like i will.
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Post by Wander on Oct 29, 2009 15:48:19 GMT -5
Nightshift is tall, long, lean and lithe;
Good line but ; I belive you meant an L. I Loved it he seams so dark and evil i wonder what you will crank out next
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Post by Onyxdart on Oct 30, 2009 6:49:58 GMT -5
Wander: That sentence is fine, it doesn't need any capitals. All adjectives are lowercase, unless it's in the proper name (like a Red Deer, or Blue Footed Booby), which those aren't.
But while we're on grammar, "His eyes being cold, hard gray" isn't a sentence, but "His eyes are cold, hard gray" is, as are several versions of attaching that sentence to the one before it. It doesn't matter, but, you know, since we were already talking about grammar...
Writ: Looks good! You'll have to speak with someone who knows more about what's going on than I do (like Bane or Cinder, or Umber, I think) to make sure they're alright with that Coven thing. Maybe later on or now, whenever, add some more to the personality, but I know how those are to describe with a new character, so I'll be sympathetic. I'll go ahead and approve the character, leastwise! Have fun!
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Post by Writ & Nightshift on Nov 3, 2009 20:29:20 GMT -5
Wait. You mean Writ, right?
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Post by Onyxdart on Nov 4, 2009 11:41:20 GMT -5
I was talking to both of you. That's why part of it is "Wander:" and the lower half is "Writ:". The lower half was aimed at you. I accepted your character. I was correcting Wander for her incorrect correction of your correct grammar.
In other words, you're good to go.
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Post by Amberstar on Nov 4, 2009 16:18:44 GMT -5
In my own opinion, Onyx did well in accepting you. However, to answer the question of the 'Coven', as you'd so like to start, here's my own input.
There are far too many clans and what not here on BoTW, so I'd not want you to suddenly create your own clan and just throw it in here. What you might want to do is start off as a rogue, and perhaps find some other rogues who might sympathize with your cause and start the coven from there. c:
Yet that's just my input, and I'm not the sole admin of this site. You'd also best want to get Bane and Umber's ideas on it as well.
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