Umberwings & Rustshade Kits [Adoption thread]

[.::Umberwings]

PLEASE READ - As a first note, before I even mention the kits, I would like to say this. I want for these kits to go to experienced RP’ers, which means that I’m requiring roleplay samples for each adoptable kits. Correct spelling, correct grammar, as well as at the bare minimum a paragraph [seven-nine good sentences] is an absolute must.

I might be lenient if I know you well and know you’re a great RP’er already. xD

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-Kit 1-
Darekit.
Tom.
Small like mother, black with faint rust markings.
Adopted by Cinder. Personality will be up to her.

-Kit 2-
Troublekit.
She-cat.
Black, with vibrant gold markings; golden-yellow eyes.
Troublesome, clever, bold, reckless.
Adopted by…me, Umber. xD

-Kit 3-
Wispkit.
She-cat.
Small like mother; solid black.
Deceased; genetic-born illness.

-Kit 4-
Shykit.
Tom.
Golden tabby, large like father; jade green eyes.
Quiet, shy, skittish. Has a heart of tempered steel, however, and can be strong willed. Likely will be a lover boy when grown, if he can get over the shyness.
Adopted by Onyx.

-Kit 5-
Musekit.
Tom.
Between parents’ sizes; soot-grey with rusty-brown patches; one yellow eye and one blue eye.
For the longest time, fragile and ill. The genetic born sickness that claimed Wispkit also affects him, producing seizures and chronic fevers. Upon apprentice age, he will go blind in one eye [RP’er can choose which one], however as he grows older he will grow out of the illness that plagues him.
Cold, distant, but very protective and caring. Adventurous, he is unafraid to stand up to his louder ,and older, siblings.
Adopted by Rippleluff.

[shadepools]

erm... may I have Shykit??

[.::Umberwings]

Shadepools, please read the note before the kits' stats. I require a roleplay sample following the guidelines I set up there please, and that will not guarantee you that kit if other people try for it. A decision will be made to who gets the kits between myself and Cinder, as we'll pick the best player we feel will be right for the kit.

[shadepools]

ok. Anyways, I forgot to read thae note so.. If I may have him, Here's the rp sample:
The large golden brown tom stalked through the clearing, pretending that it was the vast moors of Rouge Meadow. He stalked..and stalked...and stalked, until he found an imagianary foe. He pounced on it, landing on the sandy floor beneath him. His name may be Shykit, but he was very fun, or atleast, that's what he thought.

[Ripplemist]

Here's my failure tryout for Musekit! Never tried applying for a character before, so this = more fail than usual.

What was that?
The small gray kit rose to his paws unsteadily as he gazed out of the tunnel into the darkness of the cavern that they called home, his ears pricked and his odd eyes watchful. Musekit had heard something. He was certain of it. Whatever it was, he wanted to find out its identity for himself.
...What if it was a fox?
If it was a fox, he decided, he'd chase it off before it could hurt any of his clanmates. Without pausing to consider how easily foxes could kill grown warriors, he padded out of the den, careful not to wake his siblings up, and came face to face with one of his clanmates.
"Musekit? What are you doing up?" The warrior looked startled, her voice partly muffled by the piece of freshkill in his mouth.
"...Nothing, really. I could ask you the same thi-" The kit broke off as he lapsed into a fit of violent coughing and struggled to breath air. Her eyes filled with concern, the warrior promptly scooped him up in her jaws without another word and padded down into the medicine cat's den to deposit him back at his mother's side.

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[.::Umberwings]

Shadepools ;; I'm sorry, but I am going to decline your application for Shykit. Not only is your RP skill not quite at the level I would prefer for Shykit to go to, but you did not capture the tom properly at all in your sample.

Ripplemist ;; Unless Cinder has any other say, I accept your application for Musekit. Nicely done, I can tell you're going to be wonderful with him already!

[Goldenblaze]

<sub>I've no qualms with Ripple taking on Musekit. c:

As for Shadepools, I'm afraid I must agree. Your post doesn't fit the standard, and Umber mentioned it; It doesn't fit into Shykit's personality. Good try, though, and good luck. ^^</sub>

[shadepools]

Thanks, it was kinda hard because I didn't ever have a charrie who had that personality.

[Onyxdart]

May I apply for Shykit? I love the shy ones.

The little tabby tom crouched just inside the entrance to the nursing den. A leaf blew by outside and he jumped to the side, fur half puffed up before he realized it was only a leaf. Then he poked his head out of the den, looking around for his siblings. He didn't have his brother's courage, but he'd set his mind to going outdoors. With or without his siblings, he was going, and that was that. Even if they were perhaps a little young to be wandering freely all by themselves.

Gingerly, as if he thought someone would jump out and catch him, he took a few steps out of the den. His little tail flicked in question at one of the few full views he'd had of the big wide world. A crow flew over, and he jumped nearly out of his skin. Deciding that he'd done what he set out to do, the kit retreated back into the nursing den, back to the safety of what he already knew- time enough to learn bravery later.

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It's so hard to catch a personality in one short post! Argh!

[.::Umberwings]

You captured him perfectly, Onyx. <3 You'll certainly do Shykit well, and I accept your application for him. Congrats and enjoy~