Spiritwind

[starrain]

Name: SpiritWind
Age: 2 moons
Gender: She-cat
Personality:

SpiritWind is a well..... she is a little lovebel furrball!!*in the newborn stage* she is very highstrung (a.k.a very highper) and she loves wresling with other kits and is very picky about her food other wise she is this littel a furrball :3

Description:

she is brown like a milk chocolet-brown and black no not pich like twilight black,her mother keeps her furr soft and silky *like kits furr should be* Her eyes are a mix of terqoise and babby blue, the right front paw is white and she has a white almost like wind lickd her on the side of her back by her hip.

History:

Her mothers famliy was killd wile her mother *LighPaw* was young,and her father was trampeld to death by oddly deer and her mother is raseing her along side a freind RainPelt. spiritwind was born in skyclan and then was kickd out by the leader becuse *LightPaw was not born there* So they joind stelthclan and were welcome by the leader SpiritWind is growing fast and Rainpelt was sharing tongs with Lightpaw and they are mates now and expecting kits!! *1 or 2*

Other:

ok the peronality wasnt that grate but dont be critacul i am only a child!!! sorda

[Bane]

This needs to be run through a spellchecker. You also need to use punctuation and capital letters.

[Bane]

Better... you still need to spellcheck it, you have a lot of mistakes. I suggest trying to break down your sentences into smaller sentences, because I've noticed that you use the word "and" a lot. Instead of saying and, try stopping the sentence there and starting a new one. =) hope this helps.

[shadepools]

STARRAIN, I GAVE YOU SPIRITWIND TO USE IN YOUR REALLIFE STORY ABOUT EMBERPELT AND SATRRAIN!!!! you stealed!!!!
how dare you!!

[lostwing]

*mouth drops open* OMG. That is really really good.

[shadepools]

what is??

[lostwing]

the whole thing. VERY COOL