Post by Pripyat on Sept 30, 2008 6:21:51 GMT -5
Erm, could you please read through this again or run it through a spellchecker? There are a lot of typos, which makes this pretty hard to read.
The personality is really vague; it would be nice if you could add a teensy bit more specifics in there. The point of a personality is to give readers an idea of how your character acts, and this two-liner doesn't give the slightest clue.
Also, what would be 'twilight black'? Do you mean dark gray, almost black? And what do you mean by kalidoscope eyes? We prefer to keep it at least mostly realistic at this site, so if his eyes are literally kalidoscope, I'm afraid I won't be able to accept this.
Now, for the history...I assume you mean that Twilight's sisters are from a younger litter, right? You weren't being very clear there. And there's no RiverClan here--did you read any of the site's information? We have MistClan, TreeClan, StoneClan, DuskClan, RisingClan, StealthClan, and the exiled BoneClan.
You put '20 moons' in the age part of this bio, but put '29' moons on his description; which is Twilight?
= Kest
The personality is really vague; it would be nice if you could add a teensy bit more specifics in there. The point of a personality is to give readers an idea of how your character acts, and this two-liner doesn't give the slightest clue.
Also, what would be 'twilight black'? Do you mean dark gray, almost black? And what do you mean by kalidoscope eyes? We prefer to keep it at least mostly realistic at this site, so if his eyes are literally kalidoscope, I'm afraid I won't be able to accept this.
Now, for the history...I assume you mean that Twilight's sisters are from a younger litter, right? You weren't being very clear there. And there's no RiverClan here--did you read any of the site's information? We have MistClan, TreeClan, StoneClan, DuskClan, RisingClan, StealthClan, and the exiled BoneClan.
You put '20 moons' in the age part of this bio, but put '29' moons on his description; which is Twilight?
= Kest
